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"When her seafaring father goes missing, a headstrong girl who grew up upon stories of the sea, disguises herself as a boy and joins the crew of a Phoenician trading galley to discover clues to her dads whereabouts."
Rutger; I like the idea of adding 'one of her fathers trading galleys' because I see her father as a successful Phoenician trader. It also gives the crew a reason to help her on her quest when they inevitably discover she's a girl. Out of loyalty and friendship with her father they take on her questRead more
Rutger; I like the idea of adding ‘one of her fathers trading galleys’ because I see her father as a successful Phoenician trader.
It also gives the crew a reason to help her on her quest when they inevitably discover she’s a girl. Out of loyalty and friendship with her father they take on her quest to discover what happened to him.
As for the time frame, I was thinking around 400 BC. but I am flexible on that.
See less"When her seafaring father goes missing, a headstrong girl who grew up upon stories of the sea, disguises herself as a boy and joins the crew of a Phoenician trading galley to discover clues to her dads whereabouts."
DPG; a solid re-write, taking out 'who grew up upon stories of the sea,' does help the logline flow. The pirate idea gives the lead a solid goal, however I was thinking of this as a possible TV series. The ragtag crew get's into one scrape or another in the ancient Mediterranean with an overall storRead more
DPG; a solid re-write, taking out ‘who grew up upon stories of the sea,’ does help the logline flow.
The pirate idea gives the lead a solid goal, however I was thinking of this as a possible TV series.
The ragtag crew get’s into one scrape or another in the ancient Mediterranean with an overall storyline of ‘what happened to the leads father’
A little bit ‘Star Trek’, a little bit ‘The Odyssey.
See less"When her seafaring father goes missing, a headstrong girl who grew up upon stories of the sea, disguises herself as a boy and joins the crew of a Phoenician trading galley to discover clues to her dads whereabouts."
DPG; a solid re-write, taking out 'who grew up upon stories of the sea,' does help the logline flow. The pirate idea gives the lead a solid goal, however I was thinking of this as a possible TV series. The ragtag crew get's into one scrape or another in the ancient Mediterranean with an overall storRead more
DPG; a solid re-write, taking out ‘who grew up upon stories of the sea,’ does help the logline flow.
The pirate idea gives the lead a solid goal, however I was thinking of this as a possible TV series.
The ragtag crew get’s into one scrape or another in the ancient Mediterranean with an overall storyline of ‘what happened to the leads father’
A little bit ‘Star Trek’, a little bit ‘The Odyssey.
See less