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When a remorseful vampire is mortally wounded by a ruthless hunter, she leads a team to steal a clean-blood serum from a high security processing facility in order to heal herself for the sake of her four-year-old son.
I think you are on the right track with having the son in the logline, I would up the steaks even more and have the son gravely wounded.
I think you are on the right track with having the son in the logline, I would up the steaks even more and have the son gravely wounded.
See lessWhen a remorseful vampire is mortally wounded by a ruthless hunter, she leads a team to steal a clean-blood serum from a high security processing facility in order to heal herself for the sake of her four-year-old son.
I think you are on the right track with having the son in the logline, I would up the steaks even more and have the son gravely wounded.
I think you are on the right track with having the son in the logline, I would up the steaks even more and have the son gravely wounded.
See lessResponsible for the death of his son, a father tries to explain his actions leading up to the tragedy before taking his own life.
I'm not thrilled with the line, "...a father tries to explain his actions leading up to the tragedy" In the words of Yoda, "do or do not, there is no try." ----- "Responsible for the death of his son, a father recounts his actions leading to the tragedy before taking his own life." ----- Since the lRead more
I’m not thrilled with the line, “…a father tries to explain his actions leading up to the tragedy”
In the words of Yoda, “do or do not, there is no try.”
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“Responsible for the death of his son, a father recounts his actions leading to the tragedy before taking his own life.”
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Since the logline is short enough, I would consider adding who he’s recounting the events too and for what purpose. (Unless that spoils the ending)
Hope that helps. Good luck!
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