1. Posted: April 10, 2019In: ,

    When their creator suddenly passes away, two sentient cyborgs must go against their programming and try to find a family for their creator’s son.

    Robb Ross Samurai

    Yup, just read about this sale to Lionsgate. The article mentions the heart of the story: While Jack, Amy (the cyborgs), and Sam (the boy) attempt to blend in among modern suburbia, they hilariously discover that they may actually be the family they have been looking for all along. First take: WhenRead more

    Yup, just read about this sale to Lionsgate. The article mentions the heart of the story: While Jack, Amy (the cyborgs), and Sam (the boy) attempt to blend in among modern suburbia, they hilariously discover that they may actually be the family they have been looking for all along.

    First take: When their creator passes away, two sentient cyborgs take his son to the suburbs and struggle with an incognito life as they seek a real family for the boy.

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  2. Posted: April 3, 2019In:

    Bound by an inescapable sense to carry out his late master’s legacy, a masked hitman becomes a rising gangland player with the sole purpose of taking down the very criminal organization who employ him.

    Robb Ross Samurai

    Somehow missed this. Agree with Richiev. However, add details to make this stand out since the general story has been done many times before. That might be more about the protag, when this is, where, etc. "Masked" gives this a superhero feel, but nothing makes that seem necessary or at least worthyRead more

    Somehow missed this. Agree with Richiev. However, add details to make this stand out since the general story has been done many times before. That might be more about the protag, when this is, where, etc.

    “Masked” gives this a superhero feel, but nothing makes that seem necessary or at least worthy enough for the logline. Clarify if the mask is important; otherwise, cut it.

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  3. Posted: April 3, 2019In:

    With the help of the gods, the son of the Devil goes to earth to send the demons and creatures back to Hell that escaped after an explosion opens up a pathway for them to leave before they overrun earth and destroy everything.

    Robb Ross Samurai

    Better to go with a longer logline than to have the wrong kinds of questions raised. The devil having a son is not a common idea so the point of it here should at least be hinted to. Why does the son want the demons back? How does the son act (seemingly) against his father? Why is the son needed wheRead more

    Better to go with a longer logline than to have the wrong kinds of questions raised. The devil having a son is not a common idea so the point of it here should at least be hinted to. Why does the son want the demons back? How does the son act (seemingly) against his father? Why is the son needed when the gods can take care of everything?

    Offer a sense of how many escape, tens, hundreds, thousands?

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