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A nonchalant young woman who can feel no romantic emotions asks a hopeless romantic guy to teach her how to fall in love for the first time.
Along with what Richiev says...That she doesn't feel romance is the issue so no need for nonchalant, which anyway feels off. Instead, paint more of the picture, as with her career or personal situation.The lack of that emotion needs to be clearer so that we relate or empathize.? Is it a real or makeRead more
Along with what Richiev says…
That she doesn’t feel romance is the issue so no need for nonchalant, which anyway feels off. Instead, paint more of the picture, as with her career or personal situation.
The lack of that emotion needs to be clearer so that we relate or empathize.? Is it a real or make-believe medical issue? Is it a matter of how she was raised?
What is the conflict when she recognizes the issue and gets help from an appropriate person?
Next attempt, see that any adjustments add up to a picture of the A Story. What actually happens most of the time?
See lessA suicidal mercenary sets out to rescue the girl he was hired to protect, the girl who gave him a reason to live, after she’s kidnapped for ransom.
No argument there. Normally the flaw or issue implies or touches on the theme or arc and here I figured it's the opposite by specifying redemption. If I were working on this idea, there would be a couple of more logline attempts.
No argument there. Normally the flaw or issue implies or touches on the theme or arc and here I figured it’s the opposite by specifying redemption. If I were working on this idea, there would be a couple of more logline attempts.
See lessA suicidal mercenary sets out to rescue the girl he was hired to protect, the girl who gave him a reason to live, after she’s kidnapped for ransom.
It's a good point to reflect the emotions, which can also be expressed as a logline being accurate to the story.If it didn't exist and I came up with the idea, a logline for craft could be:In Mexico, a former mercenary sees hope for redemption thanks to the businessman's daughter he bodyguards- andRead more
It’s a good point to reflect the emotions, which can also be expressed as a logline being accurate to the story.
If it didn’t exist and I came up with the idea, a logline for craft could be:
In Mexico, a former mercenary sees hope for redemption thanks to the businessman’s daughter he bodyguards- and then, after she’s killed in a botched kidnapping, brings harsh justice to those responsible.
At the Midpoint or within the few minutes before the second half of Act II starts at 60, the audience and characters believe the girl died.
IIRC, redemption is the theme or character’s arc and unifying factor…which implies the ending as he finds the ultimate redemption by giving up his life for the girl (after learning late in Act II that she’s still alive).
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