1. Posted: April 30, 2019In:

    After blowing his investor?s money in one drunken night, a socially awkward college student struggles to produce a movie with no budget or risk being found out.

    Robb Ross Samurai

    For coming of age, usually there are more than two points or episodes or there's one episode/story with multiple moments. But if the story remains mostly as is, something stronger still needs to connect the parts and the two parts should be stated. For example (and not trying to make it perfect):InRead more

    For coming of age, usually there are more than two points or episodes or there’s one episode/story with multiple moments. But if the story remains mostly as is, something stronger still needs to connect the parts and the two parts should be stated. For example (and not trying to make it perfect):

    In the shadow of his famous father, a? student director must make a million-dollar movie after blowing an investor’s money and then struggles with the fame after its unlikely success.

    The thing about finding himself is that someone in a creative field usually knows that he’s creative. That’s why things were shifted with the father to make it more specific.

    If he remains a student, then it’s not the same as an indie film. Though why is he a student when someone invests in him? Could this be his first project after school?

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  2. Posted: April 25, 2019In:

    In 1977, a reformed ex-con, desperate to pay for his mother?s hospital bill, returns to his old life of drug dealing but soon learns the game has changed and the players are more ruthless than before.

    Robb Ross Samurai

    The Blackout lasted two days. Even if it's stretched, how can it last long enough for a series? For the sake of discussion, a hook without the main character is a fraction of productions or depends on how one defines a hook for the sake of a logline...and my thoughts are more movie-oriented. One thaRead more

    The Blackout lasted two days. Even if it’s stretched, how can it last long enough for a series?

    For the sake of discussion, a hook without the main character is a fraction of productions or depends on how one defines a hook for the sake of a logline…and my thoughts are more movie-oriented. One that comes to mind is ‘Amazing cars’ for The Fast and The Furious. However, note that the hook is something uncommon since most people don’t see those cars up close and certainly not in wild stunts. Compare that to ‘Late-70s New York’ or even ‘The drug trade in late-70s NY,’ which are known to many people.

    Examples of a hook when the setting is known or common: ‘In late-70s Brooklyn, a poor altar boy doubles as a drug dealer.’ ‘The early years of (recent big criminal) in late-70s NY.’ ‘Young lawyer disillusioned with a prestigious life in Manhattan doubles as a drug dealer in Brooklyn’ (and then the time and place enrich it).

    ‘Ex-con doing what he used to do (in late-70s NY), but with new people involved’ is not yet the hook.

     

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  3. Posted: May 3, 2019In:

    After a graduate student is asked to identify a body?his pot-dealer?s, he enlists the help of two other clients to give the man a proper burial.

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    Robb Ross Samurai

    Try a logline for each possibility as writing the thoughts is the only way forward. Since you don't have the answer as to what was in the envelope, consider that the story doesn't answer it, either. It could be a McGuffin or running joke or...

    Try a logline for each possibility as writing the thoughts is the only way forward.

    Since you don’t have the answer as to what was in the envelope, consider that the story doesn’t answer it, either. It could be a McGuffin or running joke or…

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