… Yes, you’re right “on this forum they told me it’s called “burying the lead” but I have no idea how to differently construct the logline and solve this problem. The video is about ‘an unrealistic friendship between a “hammerhead shark with an identity crisis and a bunch of dolphins”. My first logline represents the stated friendship” and my revised logline represents the ?identity crisis?. I like unrealistic friendships between animals too, but it has been done so until know – I prefer my second attempt at a solid logline, although it’s too long and the first one is really short. 🙂