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A crisis manager by day and citizen journalist by night is recruited by a vigilante mob to expose the corporation he is paid to protect.
I'm assuming corporate ethics (conflict of interest concerns) go out the window with this one, and he ends up using his access as a way in.? The vigilante mob probably has at least a mostly just cause, so, assuming the part time journalist decides to go along with it, he's going to have a very easyRead more
I’m assuming corporate ethics (conflict of interest concerns) go out the window with this one, and he ends up using his access as a way in.? The vigilante mob probably has at least a mostly just cause, so, assuming the part time journalist decides to go along with it, he’s going to have a very easy time of it, without much risk, let alone required skill.? I think while you’re trying to use this “conflict of interest” as the conflict of your movie, being actually employed by the corporation hurts more than helps.
Also, I wish there was something in there that gave me a sense of why the corporation is bad, or at least why the mob thinks it is.
See lessA British Gangster who is dying flies to the States, with his gang?s money, to see the old West in search of a perfect end to his once violent career.
I like this one... there's a protagonist with a goal, and the obvious threat of conflict, but, the only thing I'm iffy about... this "perfect end" in "the old West" seems a bit ambiguous.? I can see maybe he wants to reach the Alamo, or maybe the town where his childhood idol, Billy the Kid died.? YRead more
I like this one… there’s a protagonist with a goal, and the obvious threat of conflict, but, the only thing I’m iffy about… this “perfect end” in “the old West” seems a bit ambiguous.? I can see maybe he wants to reach the Alamo, or maybe the town where his childhood idol, Billy the Kid died.? You show the British Gangster while a youth, and have it tie back to that, speaking to the romanticism of violence in our culture.? I think you explain the purpose of his goal nicely in your logline, but I think it’s simple enough to add a specific plan without making it too wordy since you can just replace “to see the old West”.
See lessAn awkward, shy and self-conscious woman must learn to dance salsa with her old crush, for her best friend’s wedding
Awkward, shy, and self-conscious ... too many adjectives.? I'd at least drop "shy", because I'd imagine that's implied by self-conscious. The fact that she's dancing with an "old crush" doesn't seem important, mentioning him in a logline seems even a bit out of place.? I'd remove "with her old crushRead more
Awkward, shy, and self-conscious … too many adjectives.? I’d at least drop “shy”, because I’d imagine that’s implied by self-conscious.
The fact that she’s dancing with an “old crush” doesn’t seem important, mentioning him in a logline seems even a bit out of place.? I’d remove “with her old crush” unless there’s something else you’d want to add that makes it say more than “here’s where the romance will be”.
I do like the good ol’ practice-dancing movie…? whether it be to get into a great school, to have a glorious performance, or whatever, but dancing at a wedding doesn’t seem to be a very grand moment.? While I agree the bar needs to be set lower for the self-conscious, awkward dancer, there probably needs to be higher stakes, so we know why she’s doing it.
Maybe something like:
An awkward, self-conscious woman must learn to dance salsa for the wedding of her best friend, who was recently diagnosed with a brain tumor.
I would watch THAT movie.
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