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Set around the riots in Redfern during 2004 AROUND THE BLOCK is about breaking family and cultural cycles for a hopeful future. A contemporary story of love, revenge andtriumph, a young Aboriginal boy becomes torn between his unexpected love of acting and the disintegration of his family
Geno Scala (sharkeatingman), judge.
Geno Scala (sharkeatingman), judge.
See lessSet around the riots in Redfern during 2004 AROUND THE BLOCK is about breaking family and cultural cycles for a hopeful future. A contemporary story of love, revenge andtriumph, a young Aboriginal boy becomes torn between his unexpected love of acting and the disintegration of his family
A bit long and disjointed, I'd say. As Nick points out, start out with "the young Aboriginal boy", and you should always start with words like "When", or "As", or "After", etc. "When an aboriginal boy chooses between acting or staying in the family business, his choice could result in losing his lovRead more
A bit long and disjointed, I’d say. As Nick points out, start out with “the young Aboriginal boy”, and you should always start with words like “When”, or “As”, or “After”, etc.
“When an aboriginal boy chooses between acting or staying in the family business, his choice could result in losing his loved one’s, his financial security, and his girlfriend to the evil store manager.”
Not a good logline, and certainly not yours, but that’s the general set-up.
See lessTHE 5TH SHADOW is a dark, surreal thriller with a troubled protagonist, searching for one last masterpiece and a mysterious villain. This is the deep exploration of a disturbed man, alone in a world that has no place for him and the razor thin line between dream and reality.
The logline as currently stated is missing many crucial elements, and needs to be restructured and reconfigured if it there is any hope of effectively promoting the script. Identify the protagonist, antagonist, the goal, the obstacles, the stakes, the "hook" (what separates this story from all otherRead more
The logline as currently stated is missing many crucial elements, and needs to be restructured and reconfigured if it there is any hope of effectively promoting the script. Identify the protagonist, antagonist, the goal, the obstacles, the stakes, the “hook” (what separates this story from all others of its genre), any irony and have it give the tone of the genre( do not state it).
A more effective logline might read something like: When a troubled (blank/ protag) searches for a final masterpiece (goal), he encounters a (blank/ antag) bent on stopping him (obstacle) in order to rid the world of (blank/stakes). The “hook” is your unique plot point, and the tone should suggest genre.
Geno Scala (sharkeatingman)- judge
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