“As a cursed detective is framed by a killer determined to expose the existence of werewolves, he must accept the beast within or be lost to it forever.”

I think it’s a good start (even though I’ve seen enough werewolf concepts for two lifetimes!)

There’s something missing, though. What’s the hook? I get that the detective is framed by a killer.

I get that the detective is a werewolf.

The killer is “determined to expose the evidence of werewolves”; this is odd. He’s a killer, right? Who cares what he was to “expose”? Does he or does he not know the detective is a werewolf. I’m imagining that he doesn’t otherwise he would just “expose him”.

Are you really telling us is this guy who wants to “expose” the existence of werewolves, knows the detective is one, so he himself kills someone to make it look like the detective did it? It seems a bit convoluted, when all he really has to do is get proof that the detective is an actual werewolf.

Lastly, the idea of “accepting the beast or be lost forever”? Is that really a choice? It seems to me, working as a detective, he has already made that decision to accept it. If he can’t, he can kill himself. Someone either has that moral compass or they don’t. IMO, they don’t “accept” being murdering, carnivorous lycanthropes after living a relatively “good life” prior to that.

In summary, I think the logline has promise, but it lacks a true “hook”- something that separates it from all others. In addition, the concept as it currently stands seems a bit flawed.

Good luck with it, and hope this helps the creative juices some!

Geno Scala (sharkeatingman)- judge