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When an Indian immigrant suspects his crazy wife?s fidelity, he enlists his friends to get the proof he needs to get divorced and escape with his sanity..
Seems a bit clunky to me. I'm guessing it's a comedy. I don't think the goal of a divorce is high enough, unless they live in India and divorce is taboo; in the States, you generally do not need to prove infidelity. I like the premise, though. I can definitely see a bunch of stumbling fools trying dRead more
Seems a bit clunky to me. I’m guessing it’s a comedy. I don’t think the goal of a divorce is high enough, unless they live in India and divorce is taboo; in the States, you generally do not need to prove infidelity. I like the premise, though. I can definitely see a bunch of stumbling fools trying desperately to prove someone a wife is being unfaithful, and can picture the ending when he realizes she really DOES love him, and all is good. I’d try to work on it a bit more to make it smoother.
See less?Two uninspired and perpetually high film students document the final days of an emotionally destroyed detective, believing his demise will give their career the kick-start it needs.?
What makes you think the detective died, and if he did, do you think that's required or necessary in the logline? It seems to me you are asking questions about the story that is not necessarily part of a logline. But, then again, I could be wrong, which is why I posted it.
What makes you think the detective died, and if he did, do you think that’s required or necessary in the logline?
It seems to me you are asking questions about the story that is not necessarily part of a logline.
But, then again, I could be wrong, which is why I posted it.
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I like the title, and the first half of the logline. I think you give away the ending in the second half, removing any curiousity. Personally, I'm not curious as to why he came to this conclusion, since it's pretty obvious to most of us that it is the right conclusion. The drama comes in when he makRead more
I like the title, and the first half of the logline. I think you give away the ending in the second half, removing any curiousity. Personally, I’m not curious as to why he came to this conclusion, since it’s pretty obvious to most of us that it is the right conclusion.
The drama comes in when he makes the decision to take these extreme measures of “judgment”. This is your hook.
Therefore, “A (describe your protag in his before-world) turns into a violent vigilante in his efforts to comprehend the senseless murder of his child and avenge her death against all things evil.”
Sounds like “Death Wish 2.0”, which is need of a re-boot!
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