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Set to the hit music of pop star Kylie Minogue, this musical spectacular follows 17-year-old Kylie Power, who, upon moving to her father?s hometown of Sydney, is given one last chance to pursue her dream of becoming a synchronised swimming champion.
"A (place a fitting descriptive adjective here) teenage who, upon moving to her father?s hometown of Sydney, is given one last chance to pursue her dream of becoming a synchronised swimming champion "or"...(place her stakes here)." Remove that Kylie Minogue nonsense. Unless you are producing and dirRead more
“A (place a fitting descriptive adjective here) teenage who, upon moving to her father?s hometown of Sydney, is given one last chance to pursue her dream of becoming a synchronised swimming champion “or”…(place her stakes here).”
Remove that Kylie Minogue nonsense. Unless you are producing and directing yourself, you’ll have zero influence on the music, soundtrack, dance numbers, stunts, etc. If you ARE producing it and directing it yourself, you can write any logline you’d like, since it doesn’t matter anyhow. The meat of the logline is the last two thirds.
Include the adjective and the stakes and you’ll have an effective logline.
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Smething odd about the word "comedy" in the same sentence as "racisim" and "riots", but if Brooks can do a Nazi musical, I guess anything's possible. As a logline, it's missing most of the elements, except of course, the genre, which was clearly stated (unnecessarily so). No sense of protagonist, anRead more
Smething odd about the word “comedy” in the same sentence as “racisim” and “riots”, but if Brooks can do a Nazi musical, I guess anything’s possible.
As a logline, it’s missing most of the elements, except of course, the genre, which was clearly stated (unnecessarily so). No sense of protagonist, antagonist, goal, obstacles, stakes, etc. Basically, just a TV guide entry.
The writer needs to learn the basics of a logline, and the Australian Film Project board, or whomever is funding this stuff, needs to improve their standards a bit. If the logline is this bad, I cannot imagine what the script is like.
Geno Scala- judge.
See lessA hotshot reality TV cameraman tries to outsmart a stalker who records him in his home and airs the footage on television.
I think it's a pretty good logline as is, as well as an interesting concept. My initial concern is the tension. I think you'll need to ramp it up some by making the stakes higher, i.e. life and death. Stalkers are not necessarily violent. If this particular stalker has a history of killing others, iRead more
I think it’s a pretty good logline as is, as well as an interesting concept. My initial concern is the tension. I think you’ll need to ramp it up some by making the stakes higher, i.e. life and death. Stalkers are not necessarily violent. If this particular stalker has a history of killing others, it would crank it up some. Has a hint of familiarity with Jodie Foster’s “Panic Room”, but the airing it on live TV takes it up a notch.
I’d see it. Good job!
Geno Scala- judge
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