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A young man who is convinced that reading a lot of monster comic books and watching a lot of monster movies makes him a qualified to roam the land in his van as a monster hunter gets his first case when he comes upon a town where the contaminated water turns the populace into frog-human hybrids with spear-tipped tongues and must find a way to stop it from spreading with help from a loal girl and a disgruntled gas station attendant
This is closer to a synopsis than a logline, so let's reduce it some. "A self-professed "monster-hunter" gets his first case when he investigates the town's contaminated water supply that turns the populace into frog-human, flesh-eating hybrids!"
This is closer to a synopsis than a logline, so let’s reduce it some.
“A self-professed “monster-hunter” gets his first case when he investigates the town’s contaminated water supply that turns the populace into frog-human, flesh-eating hybrids!”
See lessAn elderly woman fantasizes about love stories in Korean Dramas, only to realize the love that she really needs to work on is the love of her family.
Cute premise- I get it- but the logline is missing some elements. Needing "to work on...the love of her family" is only the end result, it cannot be the story. You'll need an antagonist, some conflicts, the stakes, the goals. Lot's of unanswered questions. Not familiar with a genre known as "life coRead more
Cute premise- I get it- but the logline is missing some elements. Needing “to work on…the love of her family” is only the end result, it cannot be the story. You’ll need an antagonist, some conflicts, the stakes, the goals.
Lot’s of unanswered questions. Not familiar with a genre known as “life comedy” either. Sounds a bit broad, IMO. This would be my logline take on your concept:
“An elderly woman, struggling to find contentment as her dysfunctional family deteriorates around her, escapes into a fantasy world, where her life plays out like Korean TV drama.”
The protag- elderly woman
The antag- dysfunctional family mmbers
The goal- contentment
The stakes- losing her deteriorating family, a life of unhappiness
The conflict- (inner) dealing with old age, (outer) her family
The genre- comedy/drama
The “hook”- life fantasies in “Korean drama” format
Hope this helps!
See lessA lonely young man gets caught up in the craziness of an exclusive nightclub that he discovers might be trafficking drugs but he soon falls head over heels for a quirky girl who is addicted to the club, the only way to save her and maybe himself is to bring it all down.
"A lonely young man gets caught up in the craziness of an exclusive nightclub that he discovers might be trafficking drugs but he soon falls head over heels for a quirky girl who is addicted to the club, the only way to save her and maybe himself is to bring it all down." What it boils down to is aRead more
“A lonely young man gets caught up in the craziness of an exclusive nightclub that he discovers might be trafficking drugs but he soon falls head over heels for a quirky girl who is addicted to the club, the only way to save her and maybe himself is to bring it all down.”
What it boils down to is a love story with a drug addict (regardless of what the drug is) and his efforts to save her from killing herself. Try to simplify it without too many of the extraneous details.
The problem is less about the logline than the concept itself. I don’t see a “hook” and therefore, it doesn’t differentiate itself in any way. My suggestion is to create a hook for your story the highlight that in your logline.
Good luck! (Geno Scala- judge)
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