Stephen- “…I may have to tweak the logline…” Why? I wouldn’t touch a word of it. The previous comment on “medieval” is compeletely wrong. Apparanetly, some people just don’t “get it”, but most will. Don’t change a great thing to clue in the clueless. “Pulp Fiction” made the phrase “go medieval on yo’ ass!” a part of our pop culture. Everyone understands its intent, and it doesn’t make MOST of us think of another time period. It’s perfect in the tone and the suggestion that the dragon IS, in fact, a real fire-breather.

Other points about the dragon’s name, similarities to “Braveheart” (Mel Gibson? I don’t remember a dragon in that one), or “George and the Dragon” (don’t know that one either), are completely irrelevant. If you make any changes because of those comments, in my opinion, you’d be doing yourself a huge disservice.

The concerns you mention in your responses- relax. Your logline is NOT a synopsis and only has to reveal certain elements of the story, and then, only enuf to generate interest. Had the logline for “Jaws” been two-words- “killer shark”, it might have been effective enough, but certainly, the other elements completed the vision. You do not need to tell every nuance of the story in the 25 words.

The vision is clear, the tone is obvious, the genre is obvious (sounds to be funnier than Jurrasic Park, however), and the hook is obvious. I wouldn’t touch a word of it.