Have an account? Sign In Now
Lost your password? Please enter your email address. You will receive a link and will create a new password via email.
Please briefly explain why you feel this question should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this answer should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this user should be reported.
A law-abiding citizen finds himself in a notorious gangland bar awaiting the arrival of his future self: a killer on the run who needs his help to stay alive.
Is that really a reasonable "ultimate fear", as in a phobia that someone would actually have?I think it would be better to ditch that phrase, so you could describe the actual plot a little more.I didn't see Looper, but your premise sounds like a similar spin because all we know is that its a time-trRead more
Is that really a reasonable “ultimate fear”, as in a phobia that someone would actually have?
I think it would be better to ditch that phrase, so you could describe the actual plot a little more.
I didn’t see Looper, but your premise sounds like a similar spin because all we know is that its a time-traveling story. If you describe the plot more, then it might set your story apart.
Also, instead of “man” I would use a more descriptive noun- “student”, “hobo”, “CEO”, whatever. Once you have a “his” in the log line, then we’ll know its a male anyway.
See lessA lonely, abused housewife falls in love with the female police officer who responds to her desperate domestic 911 call. The wife, ultimately, convinces her female lover to plot to murder the controlling, ego-maniacal husband in order for the ladies to begin a new life together.
I like this. Cameron's revision is very good. The only thing it loses is a sense of how desperate they are, and how bad the husband is- I think it's important to keep that. I'm not sure if it's significant that the wife convinces the officer to kill the husband, or is them pulling it off together. TRead more
I like this. Cameron’s revision is very good. The only thing it loses is a sense of how desperate they are, and how bad the husband is- I think it’s important to keep that. I’m not sure if it’s significant that the wife convinces the officer to kill the husband, or is them pulling it off together. The 2 alternatives do suggest different movies.
See lessOn the day of the NFL Draft, Bills General Manager Sonny Weaver has the opportunity to save football in Buffalo when he trades for the number one pick. He must quickly decide what he?s willing to sacrifice in pursuit of perfection as the lines between his personal and professional life become blurred.
The actual plot conflict is only vaguely described here. What does he have to sacrifice and why? What is being blurred and why? It's not at all obvious why having a first round draft pick would cause all these problems, you have to tell us. It's a very intriguing start (makes me think of Moneyball)Read more
The actual plot conflict is only vaguely described here. What does he have to sacrifice and why? What is being blurred and why? It’s not at all obvious why having a first round draft pick would cause all these problems, you have to tell us.
It’s a very intriguing start (makes me think of Moneyball) but I have no idea what actually happens in the movie.
See less