1. Posted: January 30, 2013In:

    A scared monster accidentally destroys tokyo and now must rebuild the city while avoiding capture from a crazy zoologist.

    steveylang Samurai

    I'm guessing this is a comedy of sorts? The logline supplies the basic info, I'd like more info about the monster. Otherwise it's hard to picture the movie.

    I’m guessing this is a comedy of sorts? The logline supplies the basic info, I’d like more info about the monster. Otherwise it’s hard to picture the movie.

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  2. Posted: January 30, 2013In:

    A young football chairman struggles to keep the club afloat, relationships in the boardroom are strained, will Dreary FC survive?

    steveylang Samurai

    Everyone else posted good feedback, so just 1 more- you have to give us more meat regarding the stakes. Maybe it's a 'storied franchise' or 'once legendary franchise', something to tell us why we would care about a football club. Also, the protagonist needs to have something at stake, since the storRead more

    Everyone else posted good feedback, so just 1 more- you have to give us more meat regarding the stakes. Maybe it’s a ‘storied franchise’ or ‘once legendary franchise’, something to tell us why we would care about a football club.

    Also, the protagonist needs to have something at stake, since the story is told through him. Maybe in order to get the job, he has to invest all his savings into the club, whatever.

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  3. Posted: February 1, 2013In:

    The strangest adaptation of H.G.Wells classic sci-fi! Planet Earth: A paradise untouched by human hands, until that last great day when a star fell from the sky. A crowd of curious animals gathering around this strange craft watch as it opens. Rising out came a creature unlike any other. Standing tall on two legs this being from another world slowly lifted its arm and the tool it held, pointing it at the group of earthlings. And that is when the slaughter started. Announcing the arrival of man.

    steveylang Samurai

    This is a great teaser for a great idea, but is most definitely not a logline. What actually happens when man arrives? Who are they slaughtering? Who's the protagonist? Etc...

    This is a great teaser for a great idea, but is most definitely not a logline. What actually happens when man arrives? Who are they slaughtering? Who’s the protagonist? Etc…

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