1. Posted: March 12, 2013In:

    A lieutenant?s assignment to turn an antiquated battle cruiser into a traveling museum is interrupted when he and members of the original crew are the only ones in range when a colony is attacked by alien raiders.

    timmyelliot

    I like it. It works for me. I'm not too big on the title. It feels overused, especially for such an interesting story as yours. "Old Soldiers Never Die" evokes General Macarthur's speech (even though it predates him).

    I like it. It works for me. I’m not too big on the title. It feels overused, especially for such an interesting story as yours. “Old Soldiers Never Die” evokes General Macarthur’s speech (even though it predates him).

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  2. Posted: March 11, 2013In:

    In a distant future ravaged by war, a secret society stages a fake alien invasion in order to unite the world's warring factions.

    timmyelliot

    I have an idea of the setting. I don't know anything about the protagonist or even about the conflict. For instance, the main character could be a filmmaker who is creating the fake war (Wag the Dog) or it could be a humble citizen who discovers the truth (Nineteen Eighty-Four).

    I have an idea of the setting.

    I don’t know anything about the protagonist or even about the conflict.

    For instance, the main character could be a filmmaker who is creating the fake war (Wag the Dog) or it could be a humble citizen who discovers the truth (Nineteen Eighty-Four).

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  3. Posted: March 12, 2013In:

    \\\"An 18 year old army recruit wakes up in modern time from a Vietnam era secret experiment set in Puerto Rico, that intended to train soldiers via Virtual Reality. He now suffers from distorted perception and PTSD, which introduces him in a quixotic journey trying to find reality and prove his experience, against US Army attempts to dissuade him.\\\"

    timmyelliot

    I believe it is hyphenated, like this "18-year-old." I like the ideas. I know you have an idea for an original story, but the logline needs a more tweaking. To me, it comes across as a Jacob's Ladder knock-off.

    I believe it is hyphenated, like this “18-year-old.” I like the ideas. I know you have an idea for an original story, but the logline needs a more tweaking. To me, it comes across as a Jacob’s Ladder knock-off.

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