1. Posted: June 21, 2016In:

    A family counselor must conceal her alcoholic secret from her friends and clients over her marriage turning soar.

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    Wayne Logliner

    Looks like an interesting drama. ?? Do you mean "sour"?? I'd mention the marriage first - keep it chronological.? Then mention the alcohol concealment, but also tell us why she must hide it.? I'm guessing it's for professional reasons since she's a counselor, but give us more = stakes!

    Looks like an interesting drama. ?? Do you mean “sour”?? I’d mention the marriage first – keep it chronological.? Then mention the alcohol concealment, but also tell us why she must hide it.? I’m guessing it’s for professional reasons since she’s a counselor, but give us more = stakes!

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  2. Posted: June 14, 2016In:

    When an attention seeking YouTube prankster is scammed by a car salesman he enlists the salesman?s captivating assistant to help seek compensation but her unorthodox methods and pranking involvement becomes creepy.

    Wayne Logliner

    Thanks Nir,? I see what you mean!? Below is another draft.?? I could cut off the end about the "assistant", but she is a big part of the story (an ally shapeshifting to villain): When an attention seeking YouTube prankster is scammed and left without a car to operate his business, he seeks compensatRead more

    Thanks Nir,? I see what you mean!? Below is another draft.?? I could cut off the end about the “assistant”, but she is a big part of the story (an ally shapeshifting to villain):

    When an attention seeking YouTube prankster is scammed and left without a car to operate his business, he seeks compensation but deviates into darker territory of vengeful blackmail, robbery and murder when he is wooed by the scammer?s sociopathic assistant.

    Any tips / comments are greatly? appreciated.

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  3. Posted: August 28, 2015In:

    When the first time travel ship crash lands in the prehistoric era, the crew have 3 days to fix the ship before the asteroid that wiped out the dinosaurs strikes ? exactly where they are stranded.

    Wayne Logliner

    I like the concept.? I'd go and see the movie over the next Jurassic Park any day - as long as there's not too many lazer gun fights, explosions etc. I reckon give it an interesting main character, with stakes besides self-preservation - maybe if he dies it has worldwide consequences.? And of courseRead more

    I like the concept.? I’d go and see the movie over the next Jurassic Park any day – as long as there’s not too many lazer gun fights, explosions etc.

    I reckon give it an interesting main character, with stakes besides self-preservation – maybe if he dies it has worldwide consequences.? And of course his daughter will be upset if he dies.? Cheers 🙂

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