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A neurotic writer attempts to break his noncompliant criminal brother out of jail while still trying to preserve a relationship with his bipolar wife.
I agree with NS - is the brother for or against the prison break. If he's questioning it others might also. Maybe make it clearer
I agree with NS – is the brother for or against the prison break. If he’s questioning it others might also. Maybe make it clearer
See lessWhen a young bride of an American couple living in Italy is surprised by a pregnancy, she will do all she can to hide the baby bump before her homesick husband decides to pull the plug on her Tuscan paradise and her budding art career.
Hi, It might be even funnier if she hates it in Italy but her husbands overbearing family want them to stay. Learning that she's the baby making factory they've been waiting for will apply even more pressure for them to stay - hence she wants to hide the pregnancy. It depends what your protagonist iRead more
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It might be even funnier if she hates it in Italy but her husbands overbearing family want them to stay. Learning that she’s the baby making factory they’ve been waiting for will apply even more pressure for them to stay – hence she wants to hide the pregnancy.
It depends what your protagonist is aiming to learn on the journey. Is it that she doesn’t need art if she has love, to be less selfish, to value family more?
Good luck
See lessA neurotic writer attempts to break his noncompliant criminal brother out of jail while still trying to preserve a relationship with his bipolar wife.
Hi, Wow, lots going on here and maybe in a genre conflicting way. Your logline makes me visualize either a dark comedy or an action drama which is an odd mix. Curious to know how you're going to blend the two stories - the prison break and trying to make his relationship work. Bipolar in itself is aRead more
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Wow, lots going on here and maybe in a genre conflicting way. Your logline makes me visualize either a dark comedy or an action drama which is an odd mix. Curious to know how you’re going to blend the two stories – the prison break and trying to make his relationship work. Bipolar in itself is a big subject to tackle. On top of that your protagonist is neurotic. Phew
Maybe you could make your logline help the reader better understand your vision and the genre.
Also, not sure why he can’t naturally do the prison break and still have a relationship. Does the prison break require him to leave town, does his wife oppose it?
Finally, how does your protagonist being a writer influence the story? If significantly allude to it in the logline, if not perhaps make use of the word count elsewhere.
Good luck
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