1. Posted: August 17, 2013In:

    Along with their pet turtle, a brother and sister duo encounter some of America?s most exciting historical figures while on a journey to collect jelly beans they accidentally spilled into a time portal.

    wilsondownunder Penpusher

    Hi, i like the idea of a children's movie with a time portal but I'm not sure all the elements go together. Firstly, jelly beans don't seem like something you'd risk your life going into the unknown for. If they dropped something critical in there however, like something they're not supposed to haveRead more

    Hi,

    i like the idea of a children’s movie with a time portal but I’m not sure all the elements go together. Firstly, jelly beans don’t seem like something you’d risk your life going into the unknown for. If they dropped something critical in there however, like something they’re not supposed to have in the first place (a grandfathers priceless pocket watch, a key to a safe – I don’t know), I can see them thinking they must go into the portal to retrieve it. Even better, if it was something CRITICAL to their present, going into the past to retrieve it would be even more significant. Maybe it’s something that will stop their parents getting divorced. Again – I’m just plucking things from the air.

    Secondly, keen to understand how the historical figures will help them in their journey. I guess I’m wondering who they meet and how it impacts the story. Why historical figures and not cavemen or dinosaurs? Or why not into the future. Explaining this in the logline (briefly) might paint a better picture for the reader.

    Finally, what part does the turtle play? He seems integral given he features in the logline.

    I hope this helps, good luck.

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  2. Posted: August 16, 2013In:

    When a village is plagued by beetles that eat colour, an artist grieving the loss of his daughter ventures into the nearby jungle to save a flower which is the only source of a certain shade of blue.

    wilsondownunder Penpusher

    I like this, it would be very visual. Presumably an animation? Is there anyone standing in his way? Aside from the beetles? How does the flower link to his daughters death? good luck

    I like this, it would be very visual. Presumably an animation? Is there anyone standing in his way? Aside from the beetles? How does the flower link to his daughters death?

    good luck

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  3. Posted: August 16, 2013In:

    An entitled hipster evades a murderous stalker as he sleeps his way to winning a reality television program, after he wishes for his sins to be concealed in an online video.

    wilsondownunder Penpusher

    Hi, not sure if a Hipster is the ideal character for this idea? Hipsters tend to be too cool for school. They don't really follow the mainstream and reality tv is considered pretty mainstream. Also, I'm a little bit confused by the wording - just the last line - "after he wishes for his sins to be cRead more

    Hi,

    not sure if a Hipster is the ideal character for this idea? Hipsters tend to be too cool for school. They don’t really follow the mainstream and reality tv is considered pretty mainstream. Also, I’m a little bit confused by the wording – just the last line – “after he wishes for his sins to be concealed in an online video”

    What do you mean by this?

    thanks and good luck.

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