1. Posted: September 25, 2013In:

    When an author encounters the characters he writes in the real world, creating a number of awkward and humorous moments, he must help them assimilate or return to the stories they belong in.

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    A crime writer finds himself embroiled in the underworld when the lead character from his best selling book, a Mob Boss, comes to life to track him down to have him rewrite the ending in his favour.

    A crime writer finds himself embroiled in the underworld when the lead character from his best selling book, a Mob Boss, comes to life to track him down to have him rewrite the ending in his favour.

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  2. Posted: September 24, 2013In:

    Four average-joe teenage boys join a secret anti-terrorist association. Now they must fight against terrorism plots on the streets of Seattle from a pernicious terrorist and his nefarious army of agents before it?s too late.

    wilsondownunder Penpusher

    Hi, I think the previous comments about giving your heroes a talent is valid. Why would the group recruit average joes? I like the idea of hackers, up to you though. I'm not sold on the title for an action thriller, it's a bit gimmicky. Just my opinion

    Hi,

    I think the previous comments about giving your heroes a talent is valid. Why would the group recruit average joes? I like the idea of hackers, up to you though.

    I’m not sold on the title for an action thriller, it’s a bit gimmicky. Just my opinion

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  3. Posted: September 19, 2013In:

    Jake moves into a new house and falls in love with the mysterious Brenda who has a dark secret that Jake is determined to discover while he tries to convince his reluctant mother of Brenda\'s existence. /Amanda

    wilsondownunder Penpusher

    Hi, A few points. Firstly try not to use character names. You can say "when a man...". Some questions your logline made me ask are: Why does the mom not believe this woman exists? Is the woman a ghost or his imagination? Is this a supernatural/horror film? Also, while some ambiguity might be ok, I'mRead more

    Hi,

    A few points. Firstly try not to use character names. You can say “when a man…”.

    Some questions your logline made me ask are:

    Why does the mom not believe this woman exists?
    Is the woman a ghost or his imagination?
    Is this a supernatural/horror film?

    Also, while some ambiguity might be ok, I’m not really sure what your film is going to be about. Your logline should sum up the story – the hero, their goal and desired outcome.

    When a man moves in with a mysterious woman he must … Or risk …

    I hope this helps.

    Good luck

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