1. Posted: September 19, 2013In:

    When Ed tries to commit suicide a mysterious stranger shows up and offers him a deal he cannot refuse and when Ed break the deal he has to battle not just himself but other more dark forces as well. /Amanda

    wilsondownunder Penpusher

    Is this a bit of a Vanilla Sky type film? A guy is offered happiness/a better life in return for...something? I agredd with Kalle. Perhaps define exactly what deal he makes. good luck

    Is this a bit of a Vanilla Sky type film? A guy is offered happiness/a better life in return for…something? I agredd with Kalle. Perhaps define exactly what deal he makes.

    good luck

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  2. Posted: September 20, 2013In:

    When a entire citys population disappears over night, it's up to the young soldier to find out where and why in order to find his sister again. / Amanda E

    wilsondownunder Penpusher

    I should note that the reason I changed it to 'when he returns from war' is because it explains how he himself wasn't lost with the city. If the city disappeared over night - how is it he didn't go with it?

    I should note that the reason I changed it to ‘when he returns from war’ is because it explains how he himself wasn’t lost with the city. If the city disappeared over night – how is it he didn’t go with it?

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  3. Posted: September 20, 2013In:

    When a entire citys population disappears over night, it's up to the young soldier to find out where and why in order to find his sister again. / Amanda E

    wilsondownunder Penpusher

    Hi, this is an interesting idea. I think your logline needs to reflect the goal of the soldier more. "When a soldier returns from war and discovers his home town has disappeared, he must uncover the truth in order to find his family before losing them forever" Suggested title "Lost City" good luck.

    Hi,

    this is an interesting idea. I think your logline needs to reflect the goal of the soldier more.

    “When a soldier returns from war and discovers his home town has disappeared, he must uncover the truth in order to find his family before losing them forever”

    Suggested title “Lost City”

    good luck.

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