After she’s betrayed doing a one time mission for the government, a broke data smuggler must decode the data packet encrypted in her brain to use as a bargaining chip for her life.

Now the concept is getting interesting.

The logline is vaguely similar to the premise of the 1995 movie “Johnny Mnemonic”, a William Gibson adaptation of his own short story. ?It’s about a courier who transports secure data packages in his brain.

However, I think the concept was poorly executed in the 1995 movie. ?And now it’s so out of date with current technology. ?But ?the concept is so cool, it’s time for a rethink, a reboot.

For me the hook of your story would be using humans as couriers to transmit super-sensitive encrypted data packages because the Internet is hopelessly riddled with security holes. ?(Which it is and will be despite all the patchwork solutions.)

So I ?suggest you continue to refocus and polish your idea. ?As I said, somebody’s going to reboot the premise. May it be your story that gets the green light.

fwiw

As CraigDGriffiths said. ?What is the want? ?Why has she undertaken such a dangerous and unusual assignment? ? What’s in it ?for her?

And in the current version, the story seems to turn on actions of the smuggler, not the transporter. ?Working out the solution to the dramatic problem is the protagonist’s job.. ?Which would seem to make the smuggler the protagonist, not the transporter.