A female bounty hunter holds an innocent man hostage to trap his future-self: a fugitive killer from 20 years in the future, desperate to merge identities with his younger self to stay alive.

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I've posted a more high concept logline. I've decided to emphasize action ?rather than sci-fi in the logline. Most people need to think a bit to grasp a sci-fi logline but an action logline hits home immediately. Basically, you can't underestimate the intelligence of the mid-to-lower ranks of the industry - the gatekeepers.

I think that creating intrigue is the best way to generate interest in a logline. The one-page synopsis expands on the logline but must also introduce fresh and intriguing story elements to lure people into reading the screenplay. It's basically a seduction.

I don't think I'm underestimating the potential of the project. ?All movie industries are ruled by fear of failure. ? In Hollywood and the UK- a satellite industry - they've convinced themselves that sequels, comic books and graphic novels are a safe ?bet but after the woeful summer box office returns the doors might crack open for original low to mid-budget projects. With this in mind, I'm now preparing to seriously pitch this project.

Okay, but you're not writing a "Pulp Fiction" that has its basis in familiar reality, doesn't require long and convoluted explanations to set up the world and the characters.

You're writing about a world totally unfamiliar to the audience ?with a whole set of rules that has to be explained.

And reading your synopsis brought George Lucas to mind. ?How he originally tried to cram so much of the vast "Star Wars" universe. characters and story line into one film, finally realized he couldn't and shouldn't.

Also, all other factors being equal, ?a movie with franchise potential (or intention) is easier to sell than a one-off. ? I can see the bounty hunter being a continuity character hunting down bad guys and gals through several films. ?(And -- bonus! -- a female protagonist. ?Nowhere near enough of those.)

And a successful low-budget origin film (or one in media res, like the original "Star Wars") can attract the money for a more expansive canvas in sequels and prequels.

I think you're underestimating the potential long term potential and value of your idea.?

>>>I need a radical logline that creates immediate intrigue even if I have to chuck out the rules

IOW: ?one with a High Concept hook.

Okay, but you're not writing a "Pulp Fiction" that has its basis in familiar reality, doesn't require long and convoluted explanations to set up the world and the characters.

You're writing about a world totally unfamiliar to the audience ?with a whole set of rules that has to be explained.

And reading your synopsis brought George Lucas to mind. ?How he originally tried to cram so much of the vast "Star Wars" universe. characters and story line into one film, finally realized he couldn't and shouldn't.

Also, all other factors being equal, ?a movie with franchise potential (or intention) is easier to sell than a one-off. ? I can see the bounty hunter being a continuity character hunting down bad guys and gals through several films. ?(And -- bonus! -- a female protagonist. ?Nowhere near enough of those.)

And a successful low-budget origin film (or one in media res, like the original "Star Wars") can attract the money for a more expansive canvas in sequels and prequels.

I think you're underestimating the potential long term potential and value of your idea.?

>>>I need a radical logline that creates immediate intrigue even if I have to chuck out the rules

IOW: ?one with a High Concept hook.