Betty Garcia

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on When a young Latina, Izel Madrid, finds out she descends from Aztec gods, she decides to join forces with the charmingly surly, shapeshifting detective, Elias Navarro, in order to fight supernatural crime and find out the truth about her lineage.

Solid, thorough and amazingly helpful. Thanks.
on A grief-stricken man anoints himself the prince of a make-believe country to help his young son cope with his mother’s death but the story spirals out of control and he must come to terms with his own loss before his son is taken into state custody.

The first snag, for me, is the word "anoint." An important point - the mom's death - doesn't make an appearance until the middle of the logline. ?You might introduce that earlier. ?"Coping with his wife's death...." or something like…