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To regain his status in the high ranks of the order after a shameful ban, an arrogant, yet talented sorcerer sets off to hunt one of the most vicious rebels in the realm.
After a vicious outlaw kills a member of the ruling forces of a society, a young, yet talented sorcerer sets off to hunt him down in order to protect the people and prevent a potential war. I've used both the…
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To regain his status in the high ranks of the order after a shameful ban, an arrogant, yet talented sorcerer sets off to hunt one of the most vicious rebels in the realm.
So basically, this form "In order to save the lives of his people, an arrogant sorcerer sets off to hunt one of the most vicious outlaws that ever set foot in the realm." seems to be the best shot in…
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To regain his status in the high ranks of the order after a shameful ban, an arrogant, yet talented sorcerer sets off to hunt one of the most vicious rebels in the realm.
The apprentice part is a good idea, thank you. What makes a good golden fleece is not the aquiring of the object, but the road and the experiences learn through it, that's what I'm aiming for. I think the hook…
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To regain his status in the high ranks of the order after a shameful ban, an arrogant, yet talented sorcerer sets off to hunt one of the most vicious rebels in the realm.
I'm ready to exclude the term "arrogant" since I see it causes some controversy. Tell me if you think the word "young" does more justice to the concept. What I'm trying to underline is that the sorcerer is relatively unexperienced…
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To regain his status in the high ranks of the order after a shameful ban, an arrogant, yet talented sorcerer sets off to hunt one of the most vicious rebels in the realm.
That's why I wanted to add the "arrogant" part,so people would understand why he was banned. I am familiar with the hero's journey and many other templates. This here is going to be a Golden Fleece, if you've read Blake…
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To regain his status in the high ranks of the order after a shameful ban, an arrogant, yet talented sorcerer sets off to hunt one of the most vicious rebels in the realm.
This has more insight than all facebook groups I've posted for feedback, so thank you very much. Everything you both say makes perfect sense. I will work on it a little more and repost it here to tell me what…
