A grieving mother uses ancient magic to resurrect her recently deceased daughter despite her own mother’s dire warnings resulting in deadly consequences for those closest to her.

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Former member · Singularity · 114,965 pts

Although I concur that the wording may be extraneous for the logline, I'm guessing the grandmother's warnings are central to the plot.? IOW:? they foreshadow the? dramatic problem the?mother is creating by raising her daughter.

That's intuitively sound and comports with the mythology? paradigm:? every magical gift comes with a hefty price tag,?? with consequences that are?often ?foreseen -- and always unheeded.? (Because if they were heeded, there wouldn't be a story.)

Again, we need to know what the consequences?are of?raising her daughter.? That seems to be what the plot is about.

dogger · Singularity · 87,055 pts

Although I concur that the wording may be extraneous for the logline, I'm guessing the grandmother's warnings are central to the plot.? IOW:? they foreshadow the? dramatic problem the?mother is creating by raising her daughter.

That's intuitively sound and comports with the mythology? paradigm:? every magical gift comes with a hefty price tag,?? with consequences that are?often ?foreseen -- and always unheeded.? (Because if they were heeded, there wouldn't be a story.)

Again, we need to know what the consequences?are of?raising her daughter.? That seems to be what the plot is about.

FFF · Mentor · 8,245 pts

I join the previous comments. And you can skip the grandmother warnings, they are a very minor detail in the story.