A group of subjects in a sleep experiment are stalked by multidimensional entities awakened to rip their spirits apart.

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Richiev · Singularity · 58,825 pts ★ Accepted

Do they have their memories... Just curious.

Also, since this seems to be a "Monster in the House" Story, what is the setting? Is it a lab? A town? A hospital?

Finally, is there a lead character, someone who the audience can relate to and whose eyes we see the story unfold?

chimaera · Penpusher · 50 pts

Enticing logline. Makes people (at least me) want to read it. Multidimensional entities?? I would expand on the 'awakened' part, possibly give a lit bit more details on what is going on there. Have you written the screenplay yet ? Intriguing.

kid_gokuu · Penpusher · 100 pts

The initial plot is very interesting. I think it would be very beneficial to add a protagonist to this situation and also giving that protagonist some sort of motivation in order to create a struggle between them and the multidimensional entities.? I think that your logline should depict a character that the audience can instantly connect to, rather than some random people who happen to be in a bad situation.