A has-been country singer reunites with his estranged reckless 16-year old daughter on his way to a comeback concert.

Luckily I have read previous attempts so I understand there is more going on.
Because in this version of the logline there is no conflict.
Story is conflict, and conflict is the cornerstone of any logline.

I realize that you're brainstorming the premise for options.? And I commend your perseverance.

What I, as a logline reader, am looking for is a story hook.? Something that makes this story story stand out from the pack, from all the other scripts about dysfunctional family relationships.? Something that grabs my interest, makes me want to find out what happens next.

Alas, I am not yet hooked on the story.? And the logline sets up a situation for a plot -- but it doesn't follow through with a snapshot of a complete plot.? ?Like, what's the objective goal here?? Further, I? don't a sense of the stakes.? What will be lost if they fail to reconcile?

fwiw

I realize that you're brainstorming the premise for options.? And I commend your perseverance.

What I, as a logline reader, am looking for is a story hook.? Something that makes this story story stand out from the pack, from all the other scripts about dysfunctional family relationships.? Something that grabs my interest, makes me want to find out what happens next.

Alas, I am not yet hooked on the story.? And the logline sets up a situation for a plot -- but it doesn't follow through with a snapshot of a complete plot.? ?Like, what's the objective goal here?? Further, I? don't a sense of the stakes.? What will be lost if they fail to reconcile?

fwiw