It’s all fun and games at the cemetery for a twenty something gravedigger clinging to his youth, until his ex-girlfriend’s father plots revenge for disrespecting his “little girl.”
Categories: Comedy
3 reviews
The logline sets up a ?'grave' situation -- but, alas, not a plot. ?And the 'rave' threat is rather vague. ?What does the father intend to do? Kill the young man? ?If so, the plot should say so.
A plot is not about a situation, but about what the main character must do about the situation. ?So, as a result of his ex's father's threat, what is the gravedigger going to do -- what MUST he do? ?What are the stakes? (His life, his occupation, or...?)
The logline sets up a ?'grave' situation -- but, alas, not a plot. ?And the 'rave' threat is rather vague. ?What does the father intend to do? Kill the young man? ?If so, the plot should say so.
A plot is not about a situation, but about what the main character must do about the situation. ?So, as a result of his ex's father's threat, what is the gravedigger going to do -- what MUST he do? ?What are the stakes? (His life, his occupation, or...?)
Interesting idea, feels like it has a lot of potential.