When a young party-girl’s father is framed and imprisoned, she must find the evidence to clear him and fool social services into believing she’s responsible enough to care for her little brother.
Categories: Drama
5 reviews
Age answer...She's 17. Absolutely AWESOME feedback. Thank you all for taking the time to?read it. One goal it is. Now I don't need to fit as many words?into my logline. It's a win, win! ?I love this service. Very grateful. :D
Agree with Nir Shelter that the logline ought to be framed in terms of a singular -- not a dual -- objective goal.? Because the defining characteristic of a plot is that it possess a unitary goal -- one overarching objective goal that creates the? singular"spine" of the narrative.? Or the analogy that I visualize for my own purposes, the one objective goal provides a singular clothesline on which everything else hangs, all the characters all the twists and turns of the plot and plot threads.
It seems to me that?exonerating her father is her overarching plot goal -- the clothesline on which everything else should hang.? Maintaining custody and taking care of her little brother is a complication -- and a good one -- to? achieving? that objective goal.? (How old is she, anyway?) But exonerating her father should be her objective goal? because it would solve her secondary dramatic problem of maintaining custody and providing for her little brother.
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Agree with Nir Shelter that the logline ought to be framed in terms of a singular -- not a dual -- objective goal.? Because the defining characteristic of a plot is that it possess a unitary goal -- one overarching objective goal that creates the? singular"spine" of the narrative.? Or the analogy that I visualize for my own purposes, the one objective goal provides a singular clothesline on which everything else hangs, all the characters all the twists and turns of the plot and plot threads.
It seems to me that?exonerating her father is her overarching plot goal -- the clothesline on which everything else should hang.? Maintaining custody and taking care of her little brother is a complication -- and a good one -- to? achieving? that objective goal.? (How old is she, anyway?) But exonerating her father should be her objective goal? because it would solve her secondary dramatic problem of maintaining custody and providing for her little brother.
fwiw