When an arcane creature disembowels several Asian women in 1900s San Francisco, a war-weary army officer must team with a disparate group of social outcasts to expose the corrupt city leaders behind the monster’s bloodbath.

Thanks for the feedback, guys! I'll work on it and hopefully post an edited logline soon.

The genre is horror -- not mystery.? So I think horror ought to be the focal point in the logline.

And since the story seems to be told from the pov of the protagonist, the logline should only contain information the protagonist is aware of at the time of inciting incident.? That a corrupt politician is behind seems to be? the Big Discovery. To include it in the logline would be a spoiler and loglines should not contain a spoiler.

The genre is horror -- not mystery.? So I think horror ought to be the focal point in the logline.

And since the story seems to be told from the pov of the protagonist, the logline should only contain information the protagonist is aware of at the time of inciting incident.? That a corrupt politician is behind seems to be? the Big Discovery. To include it in the logline would be a spoiler and loglines should not contain a spoiler.