1. Posted: April 25, 2013In:

    When a Mafia leader goes to jail, his impulsive shopaholic housewife must assume the role of mafia boss and finish his last deadly mission without jeopardize the rest of the family.

    almiiitey Penpusher

    I enjoyed seeing the development of this logline through your comments, twilight. The only logline element that is unclear to me in your most recent update is what is at risk if she fails. A possible revision: When a shopaholic mafia wife's husband goes to jail, she must take down his arch rival toRead more

    I enjoyed seeing the development of this logline through your comments, twilight. The only logline element that is unclear to me in your most recent update is what is at risk if she fails.

    A possible revision:

    When a shopaholic mafia wife’s husband goes to jail, she must take down his arch rival to protect her family.

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  2. Posted: April 28, 2013In:

    A murdered teenage girl sacrifices eternal life so she can return as a ghost to protect her younger sister from being her murderer?s next victim.

    almiiitey Penpusher

    Thanks for your feedback Tony Edwards and kbfilmworks. I have enjoyed the beginning stages of this project and plan to move on to the outline stage to see if this logline can become a full story. Logline.it is such a valuable support. I will do my part and leave feedback for others to make sure thisRead more

    Thanks for your feedback Tony Edwards and kbfilmworks. I have enjoyed the beginning stages of this project and plan to move on to the outline stage to see if this logline can become a full story. Logline.it is such a valuable support. I will do my part and leave feedback for others to make sure this site continues to grow. Thanks again to you both.

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  3. Posted: April 28, 2013In:

    A murdered teenage girl sacrifices eternal life so she can return as a ghost to protect her younger sister from being her murderer?s next victim.

    almiiitey Penpusher

    You are right, I have not written the screenplay. I have written both ways--writing the story and then the logline, and, as in this case, writing the logline and then the script. Each approach results in a different type of storytelling. My best guess for genre at this point would be drama/mystery/tRead more

    You are right, I have not written the screenplay. I have written both ways–writing the story and then the logline, and, as in this case, writing the logline and then the script. Each approach results in a different type of storytelling. My best guess for genre at this point would be drama/mystery/thriller.

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