kbfilmworks says: (Edit)

The protagonist is making a compelling sacrifice ? her own eternal soul. But is the younger sister at risk of eternal damnation or just at risk of losing her earthly life? I think the older sister?s sacrifice only works if the younger sister is on the verge of eternal damnation and the protagonist risks her own eternal life to save her. And if this is the case, is the protagonist ultimately not restored to eternal life for being willing to make such a great sacrifice?

Thanks for switching to the revised logline kbfilmworks.

I agree, having the protagonist save her younger sister’s eternal life, not just her mortal life, is a more compelling idea.

I had considered having the murdered girl’s eternal life restored as a reward for her sacrifice but I had an alternate idea that I hope you will review.

At the beginning of the film, I considered making the soon to be murdered girl a chess champion. At the end of the film, I envision her devising a brilliant strategy that saves her sister and restores her own immortal life. I wondered if that wouldn’t make a more compelling arc for the character–from a murdered victim to a brilliant hero who saves her own life.