1. Posted: June 26, 2014In:

    A knight from the 12th century, a little girl from WW1, a businessman from the 70's, and an explorer from the future all get lost in the same forest, where space is unaltered but time is up for grabs.

    beezeebee Penpusher

    Hi zelozelos, Very cool set-up. I am guessing they all want to find their way out of time-limbo and therefore need to figure out what's going on and how to stop it for the bulk part of the movie?

    Hi zelozelos,
    Very cool set-up. I am guessing they all want to find their way out of time-limbo and therefore need to figure out what’s going on and how to stop it for the bulk part of the movie?

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  2. Posted: June 26, 2014In:

    A group of musicians in Portland make their first nation-wide hit, but when faced with the uncertainty of continuing their careers, fake their own deaths for wealth and celebrity.

    beezeebee Penpusher

    Hi zelozelos. I LOVE this idea! So many movies out there about the hero/es getting their first big break and struggling with the usual issues: creative differences, insecurity, what have you, but can't remember a story where they go to such lengths to make it happen for them. The thing I'm not clearRead more

    Hi zelozelos. I LOVE this idea! So many movies out there about the hero/es getting their first big break and struggling with the usual issues: creative differences, insecurity, what have you, but can’t remember a story where they go to such lengths to make it happen for them. The thing I’m not clear on is whether their fake death is the inciting incident for the story, or the climax already? In other words, what is the middle of your story about? Their struggle to find a solution or their fake deaths not being a solution to their issue, and if so, where will their main opposition come from? Cheers!

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  3. Posted: June 27, 2014In:

    The worlds two worst explorers accidentally find the lost city of El Dorado, only to find that it is in fact hidden deep within North Yorkshire.

    beezeebee Penpusher

    Hi Sam. Love the irony of the incompetent ones finding El Dorado. However, I don't understand where the main conflict is going to come from, which is probably because I can't see a specific goal in this logline. This read more like an interesting inciting situation, but it's unclear what the heroesRead more

    Hi Sam. Love the irony of the incompetent ones finding El Dorado. However, I don’t understand where the main conflict is going to come from, which is probably because I can’t see a specific goal in this logline. This read more like an interesting inciting situation, but it’s unclear what the heroes want, what is standing in their way, and why defeat would be devastating for them.

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