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In early 20th century Nepal, a man-slaying tiger, rumored to be demonic, torments a rural village. After several unsuccessful attempts to capture or kill the tiger, the villagers illicit help from famed hunter, James Adley, who claims he has the perfect bait.
Below is information you should keep (not a logline suggestion) When a demonic tiger slays men in 19th century Nepal (inciting incident) a famed hunter (protagonist) is commissioned to catch it DOA (goal) Since it's a thriller instead of a fantasy, we take it's just a tiger, as opposed to a real demRead more
Below is information you should keep (not a logline suggestion)
When a demonic tiger slays men in 19th century Nepal (inciting incident) a famed hunter (protagonist) is commissioned to catch it DOA (goal)
Since it’s a thriller instead of a fantasy, we take it’s just a tiger, as opposed to a real demon. A man eating tiger is still a formidable gamble which you entertain only when you must (however famed a hunter you are) Did the villagers make him an offer he can’t refuse? WHY MUST HE risk it? Make it a little personal for him, to engage with such a beast.
‘the perfect bait’ is vague, unless you have something essential to add. The premise is interesting, good luck with the writing.
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