1. Posted: March 31, 2019In:

    Upon watching a man taking another one hostage in broad daylight, an event planner on a job interview decides to prove his skills by turning the situation into a beautiful celebration.

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    'Decides to prove himself..' is an action. What happens after this decision? Still, His Goal doesn't relate to the Inciting Incident.'By turning the situation into a beautiful celebration' is vague. More importantly: even if he achieves this, Why are we rooting for this character?

    ‘Decides to prove himself..’ is an action. What happens after this decision? Still, His Goal doesn’t relate to the Inciting Incident.

    ‘By turning the situation into a beautiful celebration’ is vague. More importantly: even if he achieves this, Why are we rooting for this character?

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  2. Posted: March 30, 2019In:

    TITLE: A Psycho In The Cockpit. LOGLINE: A psycho in the cockpit. STORY IS ABOUT: A Psycho in the cockpit.

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    Hello SteveIt's a catchy premise. Why don't you take a shot at loglining it with the Protagonist, his Goal & the Inciting Incident?I believe it provides structural clarity to the writer, and a great learning experience to its readers.

    Hello Steve
    It’s a catchy premise. Why don’t you take a shot at loglining it with the Protagonist, his Goal & the Inciting Incident?
    I believe it provides structural clarity to the writer, and a great learning experience to its readers.

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  3. Posted: March 28, 2019In:

    Which one logline should I work on: Multiple Personality Malfunction, Boy becomes king, the youngest known president, girl vs gods, woman revenge for loss of her people, or volatile guy saves city? I leave it to you. P.S. The Train Demon Script is almost done, so until this is figured out, I’ll be working on that logline to get it ready. Thank you and i appreciate the help.

    variable Uberwriter

    I like the Boy becomes king premiseKindly use 'Public' section for similar queries,'Examples' is when you attempt for an existing film

    I like the Boy becomes king premise

    Kindly use ‘Public’ section for similar queries,
    ‘Examples’ is when you attempt for an existing film

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