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When his stepdad, out of frustration, accidentally tells him his real father is Santa Claus, an autistic 12 year old sets out on Christmas Eve to find him.
Hello mikepedley85. Found this very interesting.Is an 'autistic 12 year old' that easy to believe? I have a 10/11 year old niece - diagnosed, and she's not gullible enough to take off like that (they lie on that spectrum) Maybe edit with the adjective 'gullible'..Can see father playing the lead. SugRead more
Hello mikepedley85. Found this very interesting.
Is an ‘autistic 12 year old’ that easy to believe? I have a 10/11 year old niece – diagnosed, and she’s not gullible enough to take off like that (they lie on that spectrum) Maybe edit with the adjective ‘gullible’..
Can see father playing the lead. Suggested Format-
See less“When a frustrated conversation sets his autistic 12 year old looking for his real father, Santa; A desperate widower must find him in the Christmas bustle”
Is this a valid log line? Or is it too vague and too long?
How relatable are investigators involved in mallicious (intended to harm) strategies?More importantly, how does it serve your logline?'possession' is vague, in that it's a vital piece to get their goal; to know what's stopping them..Avoid writing for multiple protagonist. The Goal is given, but it'sRead more
How relatable are investigators involved in mallicious (intended to harm) strategies?
More importantly, how does it serve your logline?
‘possession’ is vague, in that it’s a vital piece to get their goal; to know what’s stopping them..
Avoid writing for multiple protagonist. The Goal is given, but it’s unclear why the lead character would be invested in it, i.e., What’s the Inciting Incident?
See lessIs this a valid log line? Or is it too vague?
You switch Point of view in your logline. It begins from the recipient's point of view, then switches to the donor?s view.A logline should be told from one point of view, and that should be the lead character.Which brings us to the next important question? Who is the lead character? The recipient orRead more
You switch Point of view in your logline. It begins from the recipient’s point of view, then switches to the donor?s view.
A logline should be told from one point of view, and that should be the lead character.
Which brings us to the next important question? Who is the lead character? The recipient or the donor?
I like the premise. If you go with donor as your protagonist, then the only vague information is ‘untainted his family name’. Make sure to clarify the Goal of your Protagonist.
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