more random thoughts ~

1.
Who–from Mirraland–will follow his rebellion, if they intend to overthrow the real world? Which reminds me…. What would they achieve by corrupting the real world? (Just interested…)

2.
I learned from Richiev that an Inciting incident and the Goal that it engenders, benefit from a single causality. IOW, it would be better if – as a result of her appearance (your current inciting incident) his Goal becomes to lead the rebellion (your current Goal), which isn’t the case. What if your inciting incident was “When HIS reflection begs for help…”? {because What-specifically-do you wish to achieve by ‘turning him against his self’ (although, that sounds cool..)}

3.
…& Whatever you end up using (..his mirror self as an antagonist or protagonist), not mentioning it would be burying your hook!

4.
re-quoting Nettle: You NEED to specify the nature of ‘corruption’ and the threat of ‘crooked regime’

Good Luck mikepedley85!