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Take a look into the life of ?Dog? & ?Bird?. Two roommates who work for Cathedral Nightclub as Promoters in the city of Las Viami.
Hello Cejjones1989! Welcome to logline.it A simple format to start off -- (while working for a Nightclub as Promoters) two roommates face [this inciting incident] and must [reach this goal] (..or else risk [these stakes]..) Conflict must be implied. That's what makes the goal more crisp and reasonabRead more
Hello Cejjones1989! Welcome to logline.it
A simple format to start off —
(while working for a Nightclub as Promoters) two roommates face [this inciting incident] and must [reach this goal] (..or else risk [these stakes]..)
Conflict must be implied. That’s what makes the goal more crisp and reasonable. Feel free to browse through other loglines. Good luck!
See lessWhen a bipolar girl mysteriously awakens next to the body of her mother in the woods with no recollection of what happened, a troubled detective must dig deep into the secrets of a small town and its paranormal history, to find out the truth and prove the girl?s innocence.
Since it's the "troubled detective" who must prove her innocence it should be clear from the logline that he's your protagonist. Which brings us to -- why must HE be the one to investigate. What are the stakes? & what's their relation that forces him to do what he must, to drive the plot? PremisRead more
Since it’s the “troubled detective” who must prove her innocence it should be clear from the logline that he’s your protagonist.
Which brings us to — why must HE be the one to investigate. What are the stakes? & what’s their relation that forces him to do what he must, to drive the plot?
Premise is an intriguing one. Maybe drop “mysteriously” & “..with no recollection of what happened..” instead with “When her amnesiac girlfriend awakens next to her mother’s corpse…”
Good luck Ben Basso
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Agreed with the above. It lacks a visual objective goal. What must she do to win over this other member of her superhuman race? A logline must raise a single query: "Will the hero achieve his goal?" While this raises many other questions, such as: 1. How does her "being lonely" fit in the character-Read more
Agreed with the above. It lacks a visual objective goal. What must she do to win over this other member of her superhuman race?
A logline must raise a single query: “Will the hero achieve his goal?”
While this raises many other questions, such as:
1.
How does her “being lonely” fit
in the character-event-goal dynamic?
2.
What is the nature of power
that sustains and connects all life.
How does it depend on her survival?
3.
Since they are of the same race,
she CAN fight off the “vengeful superhuman”,
right? The conflict isn’t made tangible..
4.
How does them being “the last of their race” help the logline? Is it somehow related to their hostility to begin with?
PS. Remember “Colossal” (2016 Sci-fi flick by Nacho Vigalondo) Didn’t It get boring?
It isn’t required to answer these question in another post. Your second version must incorporate it in a natural way. Goodluck!!
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