1. Posted: April 17, 2018In:

    To save her relationship, a woman must finally confront her Father who sexually abused her for years.

    variable Uberwriter

    Like dpg said, there are endless loglines based on this premise To solve this 1. Posting it under a particular genre shapes a premise into logline of particular nature. For instance If it were posted under Thriller -- "When her 'true love' pursues inspite of knowing her dark past, a sceptic assassinRead more

    Like dpg said, there are endless loglines based on this premise

    To solve this

    1.
    Posting it under a particular genre shapes a premise into logline of particular nature.

    For instance
    If it were posted under Thriller —
    “When her ‘true love’ pursues inspite of knowing her dark past, a sceptic assassin must find out his real occupation”

    If it were posted under Romance
    I’d focus on the forces keeping them apart (since their goal is always-happily ever after)
    A sloppy format would be —
    “When she finds her soulmate intimidated by her past, an assassin must take out all antagonists before he agrees”

    2.
    Work out a way to relate —
    Her FINALLY finding the love of her life
    with
    The specifics of her dark past

    for instance,
    If she was the boss of a crime syndicate
    Personal Enquiry #1: What prevented her from finding true love?
    Suppose: Her infamy
    So she abstains from this business to finally find true love
    Now,
    Personal Enquiry #2: Why exactly is she having a hard time fully committing?
    Suppose: Her mafia family is on the brink of a territorial blood war and that keeps dragging her in. She cannot afford to overlook her role
    Personal Enquiry #3: What can she do about that?
    And so on…
    Write down your personal enquiry
    Once you have a rough spine, head for the logline:
    Another sloppy format could be —
    “A mafia boss finds true love in the middle of gang unrest and must [achieve this goal]”

    good luck lz

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  2. Posted: April 16, 2018In:

    In a world where humans are cloned to harvest their organs until they die, one clone struggles to postpone his fate.

    variable Uberwriter

    Never let me go (2010) by Mark Romanek but Kathy H was the protagonist (or narrator or both?)Shouldn't have made a film out of this novel, for which "Kathy" is a fine protagonistbut reads passive in the film, for which "Tommy" reads betterPS. Alex Garland is a maniac!

    Never let me go (2010) by Mark Romanek
    but Kathy H was the protagonist (or narrator or both?)

    Shouldn’t have made a film out of this novel, for which “Kathy” is a fine protagonist

    but reads passive in the film, for which “Tommy” reads better

    PS. Alex Garland is a maniac!

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  3. Posted: April 16, 2018In:

    After the catastrophic earthquakes around the world, a seismologist must uncover the reason behind the mysterious stoppage of his time at 2:00 AM, else he remains in the past.

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    variable Uberwriter

    its a great idea!! some trimming...After his time stops at 2 AM, a seismologist uncovers the mystery behind the catastrophic earthquake or risk remaining in the pastIt's a cool inciting incident but if the time stopped for him, others are frozen right? That might get uncinematic, since who will he tRead more

    its a great idea!! some trimming…
    After his time stops at 2 AM, a seismologist uncovers the mystery behind the catastrophic earthquake or risk remaining in the past

    It’s a cool inciting incident but if the time stopped for him, others are frozen right? That might get uncinematic, since who will he talk to?
    ____________________________________________________

    What if he discovers someone unpaused and chases her to discover a whole group of unpaused people?

    After encountering another unpaused human, a seismologist must solve the mystery of frozen time or risk remaining in the past

    A group of unpaused people in the frozen world will drive your Act II

    The first half could be Grand Theft Auto!!

    Upon realising they are infact “trapped”
    The second half will force them to split into 2 forces: “those to would like to stay in the past” will prevent the “those who’ve had their fun and would like to return to their kids”

    suggested title: stopwatch

    My Best wishes ashes123!

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