1. Posted: June 1, 2012In:

    Dirty Filthy Supermodel. When an untidy grumpy dustbin man is knocked down by a truck, he meets a fashion conscience God at the perly gates. He's given one month to get his face on a fashion magazine to gain entry to heaven or face expulsion to hell.

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    Looking forward to reading your 'sellable idea'.

    Looking forward to reading your ‘sellable idea’.

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  2. Posted: April 19, 2012In:

    In the final days of WWII, when a B-29 carrying the 3rd atomic bomb to be dropped on Japan crash lands on a small enemy held island the pilot, Capt. Mark Younger is captured and imprisoned in a POW camp where he must choose between helping the POWs escape, and doing his duty to stop the enemy at all costs from hijacking the atomic bomb, even if it means detonating it manually.

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    Reads like a good logline. The important point is the atomic bomb which gives it the edge over other WW2 stories. So I would still mention the atomic bomb but not give away if it will be detonated. You could hint about the character of the protagonist just to add detail and work in more dramatic iroRead more

    Reads like a good logline. The important point is the atomic bomb which gives it the edge over other WW2 stories. So I would still mention the atomic bomb but not give away if it will be detonated. You could hint about the character of the protagonist just to add detail and work in more dramatic irony.

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  3. Posted: June 1, 2012In:

    Dirty Filthy Supermodel. When an untidy grumpy dustbin man is knocked down by a truck, he meets a fashion conscience God at the perly gates. He's given one month to get his face on a fashion magazine to gain entry to heaven or face expulsion to hell.

    cicpisces

    Thanks to those with the constructive feedback. I've marked your feedback useful.

    Thanks to those with the constructive feedback. I’ve marked your feedback useful.

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