1. Posted: April 26, 2015In:

    While visiting America, a young British academic (who has an inflated sense of his own entitlement) must strive to prevent his liaison with a besotted, underage runaway from being uncovered in order to preserve his much-loved career and evade prison.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Don't mind the logline. To get rid of the bracketed explanation trying using pompous. It is used a lot to example that type of looking down the nose that British can do. To avoid prison and save his career a pompous young British academic visiting the USA must hide his liaison with a besotted underaRead more

    Don’t mind the logline. To get rid of the bracketed explanation trying using pompous. It is used a lot to example that type of looking down the nose that British can do.

    To avoid prison and save his career a pompous young British academic visiting the USA must hide his liaison with a besotted underage runaway.

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  2. Posted: April 24, 2015In:

    A backyard drug cook tests a new formula on her willing friends. It produces hallucination turning them into murderous, sadistic adversaries. She must survive their attacks as they slip deeper into madness.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Thanks Nir, I write so many unlikeable protagonist (probably says a lot about me). Her friends sell her drugs for her and love the free samples. In her coherent (dumb ass teens) she is a legend. She is trying to stop them from killer her and each other without drawing attention to herself or them. ARead more

    Thanks Nir, I write so many unlikeable protagonist (probably says a lot about me). Her friends sell her drugs for her and love the free samples. In her coherent (dumb ass teens) she is a legend.

    She is trying to stop them from killer her and each other without drawing attention to herself or them. A few die, and it all goes to crap. I have a very Tropy opening scene in mind. The young girl being interviewed by police as if she is a victim. Then we go to flashback and find it is all her fault.

    I am thinking they not just trip, but she is dumb enough to start playing a dangerous game freaking them out. Which they murderously finish.

    I am thinking she is a little like the Kevin Spacey character in “Usual Suspects”.

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  3. Posted: April 23, 2015In:

    After a dreamy adventurer returns to Greece, he faces his parents, who want to sell the beloved home of his grandparents, and only drain when he chooses their life as an obedient entrepreneur and desist from his own dreams to help as social worker people in need.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Have to agree, I have no real idea of what is going on. "Dreamy" has no weight for me, it's not really specific enough to be useful. Try and state what he wants, want he must do and what is stopping him.

    Have to agree, I have no real idea of what is going on. “Dreamy” has no weight for me, it’s not really specific enough to be useful. Try and state what he wants, want he must do and what is stopping him.

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