1. Posted: January 31, 2015In:

    An introverted teen with special powers seeks to avenge her family's killers and rescue others like her from slavery.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    I find the two goals a bit of a clash. They needed to feel more like a single story. Is one of them setting?

    I find the two goals a bit of a clash. They needed to feel more like a single story. Is one of them setting?

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  2. Posted: January 31, 2015In:

    An introverted teen with special powers seeks to avenge her family's killers and rescue others like her from slavery.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    I find the two goals a bit of a clash. They needed to feel more like a single story. Is one of them setting?

    I find the two goals a bit of a clash. They needed to feel more like a single story. Is one of them setting?

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  3. Posted: January 30, 2015In:

    In a post apocalyptic world a teenage girl takes refuge in a hidden valley after loosing her parents trying to escape the pandemic and reach quarantine. Discovered by a man that could lead her to safety, he instead betrays her. He takes over her camp forcing her to fight not only a man that is bigger, stronger and armed, but also the approaching winter.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Here is what I think works. After learning of other survivors of an apocalyptic pandemic, a teenage girl desperate to find them must fight a brutal man who has taken what she has to secure his own survival.

    Here is what I think works.

    After learning of other survivors of an apocalyptic pandemic, a teenage girl desperate to find them must fight a brutal man who has taken what she has to secure his own survival.

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