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Gifted with powers after an alien ship crash lands in their hometown, five high school freshmen struggle to deal with homework, football games and staying a step ahead of the military who want to use their powers to benefit them while trying to discover the mysteries behind the crash.
Yeah, regrettably I'm not seeing anything I haven't seen before (not in the logline, anyway). You may not have to abandon it; if you think there's something in it, why not brainstorm it? Just throw some wild ideas around: what if the teachers got superpowers, not the pupils? What if the spaceship waRead more
Yeah, regrettably I’m not seeing anything I haven’t seen before (not in the logline, anyway).
You may not have to abandon it; if you think there’s something in it, why not brainstorm it? Just throw some wild ideas around: what if the teachers got superpowers, not the pupils? What if the spaceship was from the future, not alien? What if it’s the local mayor, or the the science teacher, or a millionaire software designer, who pursues them instead of the military? I’m not saying any of those are the answer, but twisting the basic elements might lead you to something unique and interesting…
See lessSleepless Judge is a comedy action about a corrupt prosecutor who became victim of corruption himself after a wealthy banker who has an eye on his wife let him fall into an ambush after which he gets in jail for bank robbery, to prove his innocence Chris must find withheld evidence, for achieving this goal he needs help from some other immates who are also victims of his corruption practices.
The grammar is a little shaky (would I be right in thinking English is not your first language?) Changing your version just enough to tidy up the grammar, I'd make it - A corrupt prosecutor becomes a victim of corruption himself, and must find withheld evidence that will prove his innocence - whichRead more
The grammar is a little shaky (would I be right in thinking English is not your first language?) Changing your version just enough to tidy up the grammar, I’d make it –
A corrupt prosecutor becomes a victim of corruption himself, and must find withheld evidence that will prove his innocence – which he can only find with the help of his victims.
As for the story concept: I’m not sure I’d go as far as a wow-factor (but that’s just my opinion, of course). I think it’s a solid story concept with good use of irony (he has to turn to the people who hate him both for help, he’s both corrupt and the victim of corruption). If I saw this advertised, I’d probably think “yeah, I’ll go and see that” (but probably not “I ?must? go and see that.”)
But that’s just one person’s opinion…
See lessA neurotic writer struggles to deal with two failing relationships between his difficult criminal brother, who he breaks out of prison, and his psychotic wife.
How about something along the lines of: A neurotic writer finds his attempts to patch up his relationship with his psychotic wife complicated when he suddenly has to break his lifelong criminal brother out of prison Or: A neurotic writer must break his career criminal brother out of jail *and* repaiRead more
How about something along the lines of: A neurotic writer finds his attempts to patch up his relationship with his psychotic wife complicated when he suddenly has to break his lifelong criminal brother out of prison
Or: A neurotic writer must break his career criminal brother out of jail *and* repair his relationship with his psychotic wife before [impending deadline]
Neither of those are perfect, but you see what I mean about giving a sense of what will actually happen during the movie…?
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