1. Posted: June 2, 2015In:

    After learning that his father did not die when was 7 a prodigious investment banker sets off to find his dad, and does, at a silent monk monastery halfway across the world

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    What I'd found interesting is to see a banker between monks.This situation would have a potential of conflict - I see it as a comedy, from the pov of monks who meet a money maker who troubles their spiritual life, from rejection through temptation to final synthesis.

    What I’d found interesting is to see a banker between monks.This situation would have a potential of conflict – I see it as a comedy, from the pov of monks who meet a money maker who troubles their spiritual life, from rejection through temptation to final synthesis.

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  2. Posted: June 2, 2015In:

    After a punk rock band steals some stuff from the Catholic Church are forced to help a musically gifted street kid make a record for the local christian label

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    Hello, I think there's something good in this logline and it's the irony of a punk band who must work on a christian album. This is precious, and I can imagine there could be an initial resistance to collaborate, then a higher investment when the punks understand that it could be a good album or thaRead more

    Hello,
    I think there’s something good in this logline and it’s the irony of a punk band who must work on a christian album. This is precious, and I can imagine there could be an initial resistance to collaborate, then a higher investment when the punks understand that it could be a good album or that their punk attitude doesn’t really belong to them. The punks may also not agree betwen them, that’s more potential conflict.
    Besides, as said in the previous comments, you should make it clear how the punks are forced to work for the christian album. Anyway, I think at the end the christian kid must learn something from the punks and the punks must learn something from the christian kid: everyone must put down his mask. This could work.
    Good luck.

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  3. Posted: June 2, 2015In:

    A guy named Max gets rejected by a girl named Alaska. Alaska has become notorious for dating multiple guys and being a bitch to everybody because she has a troubled past involving her parents abandoning in a shopping mall which some people believe is bogus and then Max goes into a downward spiral and starts having trouble with trusting people and having insecurities he never used to have.

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    Hello, I like the title of the movie, usually you don't use names in the logline: be sure to read at least some miniguide about how to write loglines, this one for exemple: http://www.raindance.org/10-tips-for-writing-loglines/

    Hello, I like the title of the movie,

    usually you don’t use names in the logline: be sure to read at least some miniguide about how to write loglines, this one for exemple: http://www.raindance.org/10-tips-for-writing-loglines/

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