1. Posted: March 11, 2015In:

    When a broken film critic must find the most ascetic Persan director and persuade him to shoot an unrestrained blockbuster in Paris, he pick the wrong man and have to deal with him to save his career.

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    Thanks, is it better now?

    Thanks, is it better now?

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  2. Posted: March 6, 2015In:

    When a woman and her newborn are placed into quarantine, feared they are infected by the darkness which has devastated their homeworld. She escapes and gains the support of followers to free her twisted child from the prime evil which is bent on possessing their entire species.

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    I love science fiction and I'm familiar with the genre but I still don't understand your logline. I know it's hard to sum up a film in one sentence but you must try to focus, to make it simple, and easy to understand. I give it a try : "In a future Earth ruled by an alien race, a humain mother escapRead more

    I love science fiction and I’m familiar with the genre but I still don’t understand your logline. I know it’s hard to sum up a film in one sentence but you must try to focus, to make it simple, and easy to understand. I give it a try : “In a future Earth ruled by an alien race, a humain mother escapes from a slave factory and join the Resistence to free her daughter who has the key to save mankind”. Something like that?

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  3. Posted: March 11, 2015In:

    When a broken film critic must find the most ascetic Persan director and persuade him to shoot an unrestrained blockbuster in Paris, he pick the wrong man and have to deal with him to save his career.

    FFF Mentor

    Lee Brooks : impressive! I actually have the subplot with a rival critic - I wrote only a four pages but it's in it. I'm not sure about the relationship between the hero and his girlfriend, she could be someone he need to leave in order to grow. Is the new logline better? By the way, is it clear thaRead more

    Lee Brooks : impressive! I actually have the subplot with a rival critic – I wrote only a four pages but it’s in it. I’m not sure about the relationship between the hero and his girlfriend, she could be someone he need to leave in order to grow. Is the new logline better? By the way, is it clear that it’s a comedy ?

    How does it work here? is it better to edit the original logline, to post the new logline as a new post, or to publish the new logline in the comments?

    Thanks for everything

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