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An estranged couple decides for a last-chance counseling retreat in a forest just to meet a therapist who reveals their secrets that should rather have remained buried
I found the idea that a therapy is involved very interesting but... I'm still confused, is there a psycho or not? Even if at the very end we learn that it's just an hallucination (we've seen this before many times, and very well executed a few times), it's not what is important now, you don't need tRead more
I found the idea that a therapy is involved very interesting but…
I’m still confused, is there a psycho or not? Even if at the very end we learn that it’s just an hallucination (we’ve seen this before many times, and very well executed a few times), it’s not what is important now, you don’t need to spoil this kind of ending, but the logline should let us know what the movie is about. A man and a woman who fight? They fight together against a psycho? Against a mad therapist? Against many supernatural being who haunt the forest? Is the therapist a deus ex machina who set a trap for the couple so that they will be pushed to fight each other?
One more thing, usually there is only one real hero, not two. Even when there is a team, only one person is the real hero. Your movie seems tricky because you have two heroes. Even if they fight each other, the audience needs to take one side.
There is one more tricky point: you should make clear also if the couple is ‘broken’ and their experience in the forest ‘heal’ them the hard way, or if it’s two lovebirds who become rabid dogs. Usually, the best is to imagine the story that allows the longest journey… if you have a broken couple and they become rabid dogs the journey is shorter…
About Blake Snyder, let me know if I’m wrong but he’s the teacher who is the most successful as screenwriter. All the other gurus hardly wrote one single feature lenght movie… Anyway I don’t think that it’s really necessary to be a screenwriter to teach screenwriting. Maybe Snyder is not the best, but not because he has a short file on Imdb (with this criterion he would be the best!).
See lessAn estranged couple decides for a last-chance counseling retreat in a forest just to meet a therapist who reveals their secrets that should rather have remained buried
As far as I'm concerned, "a therapy that turns into their worst nightmares" is not a way to rise interst without spoiling the end. You can use this kind of sentence in a teaser not in a logline. The ending that you shoud not spoil is 'will the pycho kill everyone, or the couple will survive', etc. BRead more
As far as I’m concerned, “a therapy that turns into their worst nightmares” is not a way to rise interst without spoiling the end. You can use this kind of sentence in a teaser not in a logline. The ending that you shoud not spoil is ‘will the pycho kill everyone, or the couple will survive’, etc. But you have to give one specific detail about the kind of “nightmares” they face in the movie: this is what the movie is about and we want to know it.
By the way, Hannibal lecter has a mask 🙂 http://oaprendizverde.com.br/wp-content/uploads/2013/07/Hannibal-Lecter-Raio-X-do-Canibal-636×395.jpg
There’s nothing wrong about the mask, but it must be something original with a symbolic power.
It seems to me that your movie falls in the survival horror genre (see ‘monster in the house’ in ‘save the cat’ book). There are so so many movie in this genre but there’s always a possibility to come up with something new. I think it’s necessary to put a “new” and strong element in the logline.
See lessWhen a broken film critic must find the most ascetic Persan director and persuade him to shoot an unrestrained blockbuster in Paris, he pick the wrong man and have to deal with him to save his career.
Thanks everyone, I made a last attempt to sum up the main story. Is the logline acceptable in this last attempt? Interesting? I think my movie may have some structure problems : maybe it's not enough "confined" (paris/middle east), 1st act, the film critic accepts to try to find the Persan directorRead more
Thanks everyone, I made a last attempt to sum up the main story. Is the logline acceptable in this last attempt? Interesting? I think my movie may have some structure problems : maybe it’s not enough “confined” (paris/middle east),
1st act, the film critic accepts to try to find the Persan director (even if he have no clues),
1st part of 2nd act : the search in the Middle East mountains and the meeting with the impostor.
middlepoint : the deal with the impostor.
2nd part of 2nd act : shooting the movie in Paris
3rd act : resolution (the whole movie is a fraud and the critic leave to go looking for the real director)
Thanks again, I wait for an eventual last feedback, then I’ll go back thinking about the whole thing.
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