1. Posted: May 11, 2016In:

    A writer finds a journal and decides to use its contents for his next novel not knowing it contains hidden plans to murder a future country leader.

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    Hello, It seems an 'initial situation': no clues about what the movie is really about. "When... ? ? then...." What happens?

    Hello,
    It seems an ‘initial situation’: no clues about what the movie is really about.
    “When… ? ? then….” What happens?

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  2. Posted: May 9, 2016In:

    Using a mysterious equation to predict how and when he’ll die, a wealthy businessman must kill a corrupt government official to prevent his untimely demise, but when things go awry he starts to question if he is preventing or creating his fate.

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    Try to reword 'mysterious equation' in a way that express mystery without the word mysterious and in a way that is fully undestandable. Where does he find this equation? There's a book about this, 'The Stochastic Man': the main character is a statistics expert, maybe the 'equation' is advanced statiRead more

    Try to reword ‘mysterious equation’ in a way that express mystery without the word mysterious and in a way that is fully undestandable. Where does he find this equation? There’s a book about this, ‘The Stochastic Man’: the main character is a statistics expert, maybe the ‘equation’ is advanced statistics?

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  3. Posted: May 9, 2016In:

    After completing prison term and reuniting with his loving wife a man wanted to choose the righteous path only to find his wife wants him to murder someone for the last time to bring her to justice.

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    "murder someone" is too vague, it seems like you've not decided yet - everything depends on this element.

    “murder someone” is too vague, it seems like you’ve not decided yet – everything depends on this element.

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