1. Posted: May 3, 2016In:

    After uncovering a conspiracy plotted by the king a Templar is forced to intervene in the king’s plot before it leads to civil war.

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    Hello, your last version is not bad, but I strongly recommend?to define exaclty what you mean by "intervene". Your movie hides behind this word.

    Hello, your last version is not bad, but I strongly recommend?to define exaclty what you mean by “intervene”. Your movie hides behind this word.

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  2. Posted: May 4, 2016In:

    When he is laid off from his dream job, Joe is surprised to find his major emotion is happiness, so he reviews how he got here to understand why.

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    We have a happy unemployed man who "reviews how he got there to understand why", this is very low concept (it can be good but it's very difficult to see in in a logline - I love low concept movies but they can hardly be catched in a logline). Maybe you should focus on a clear goal for the main charaRead more

    We have a happy unemployed man who “reviews how he got there to understand why”, this is very low concept (it can be good but it’s very difficult to see in in a logline – I love low concept movies but they can hardly be catched in a logline). Maybe you should focus on a clear goal for the main character and mention the source of conflict.

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  3. Posted: May 2, 2016In:

    A washed-up news anchor and self-help aficionado, Buck Walsh, finds what may be the saving grace of his career: the lost family home videos from an unsolved double homicide. But watching all 50 minutes of the found footage extravaganza unleashes paranormal forces inside Channel 93’s Public Access TV studio. Buck must put his self-help lessons to the test and discover the demon’s true identity before he becomes the next victim.

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    Hello, try to start the logline with "when [ the main character] find?family home videos in an unsolved homicide case, he must ....

    Hello,
    try to start the logline with “when [ the main character] find?family home videos in an unsolved homicide case, he must ….

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