1. Posted: April 8, 2016In:

    Freeze

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    In my opinion this part needs to be more clear "conquer five world problems". I feel like the whole thing is very conceptual and fails to become a powerful story. Visually, what the characters do in the movie? I can't see it.

    In my opinion this part needs to be more clear “conquer five world problems”.

    I feel like the whole thing is very conceptual and fails to become a powerful story. Visually, what the characters do in the movie? I can’t see it.

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  2. Posted: April 8, 2016In:

    Stranded in the middle of Peru, a travel writer and an archeologist find themselves caught in a race against a familiar foe for an enchanted artifact (and maybe even falling for each other along the way.)

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    What is the main character goal and who or what is the opponent? where does the conflict come from?

    What is the main character goal and who or what is the opponent? where does the conflict come from?

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  3. Posted: April 8, 2016In:

    Terminally ill single dad romances a vulnerable heiress to procure a new home for his son, but his unexpected connection to her past jeopardizes his son’s life and thrusts fates of others into his hands, just as the time runs short.

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    Hello, this sounds very vague to me: "his unexpected connection to her past jeopardizes his son?s life and thrusts fates of others into his hands".

    Hello,
    this sounds very vague to me:
    “his unexpected connection to her past jeopardizes his son?s life and thrusts fates of others into his hands”.

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